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The dance sucked

Author: painofthanatos
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angry, venting, non-nice flowing poetry.

The dance sucked

Roses are red
I am blue
I'm hatting this dance
I want to throttle you

My date had pneumonia
and they convinced me to go alone
And I spent the entire night
Wanting to go home

And the couples pushing closer towards me
I hope you f***ing die

Stick your tongue a little further down his throat
I hope you f***ing choke

This crappy music
and these crappy people
are ruining my night

I dressed up all pretty
And felt uber seski
Until I saw your hideous face

Just leave me alone
Let me go home

Don't tell me I dance
better then your grandmother,
the only other woman you ever danced with
Don't tell me I dance
spastic, yet graceful
That's an oxymoron you ass

Don't tell me you're sober
Don't tell me you love me

I can see your through your lies

'Well this night was a total waste of make-up'

Submitted on 2005-02-08 11:43:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  would you mind if i completely stole your last line? i think that might be one of the best things i've ever read. i think that way a lot. i actually use the lipstick scale (how much do i care about this night? thats how much makeup i'll wear.) anyway, thats become one of my favourite quotes. thanks for the thoughtful and mildly amusing (in an 'i feel awful for you' way) read. -jinx
| Posted on 2005-05-14 00:00:00 | by jinx | [ Reply to This ]
  lemme tell you sumthin...and i only say this now because it's obviously in your past...this is freakin hilarious! seriously, the anger is overwhelming, but it's still so comedic! it's like mr. castanza on Seinfeld...he gets so angry and everything goes wrong that you just have to laugh. i'm sorry you had a bad dance, but at least a very good piece of writing came out of it ;) and that line, "'Well this night was a total waste of make-up', flippin sweet!
p.s. - poop nuggets.
| Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]
  Very interesting..kinda sounds like our Turnabout or Sadie Hawkins dance or whatever you call it. I've been stood up a coupla times and its made me kinda mad.
| Posted on 2005-03-12 00:00:00 | by AFireInside01 | [ Reply to This ]
  im sorry your nights sucked. the last line was funny though, and i know how that goes. A word of advice, pig out on ice cream, it'll make you feel better

| Posted on 2005-02-08 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
  wow... I wish that all the dances were like that so that I would know what your talking about... I liked this piece alot it had somet really good words and stuff I felt the anger that you put in to tyhis... I like...
| Posted on 2005-02-08 00:00:00 | by bleedbroken | [ Reply to This ]
  A total waste of hairpins and make-up as my grrrl says... Lol! Thys was funny as hel! I felt badd for laughing at you so much. Here- I’ll slap my wrist- *slaps* Ouch- Badd boi! Okay- feel better? Hmmmm- it’s still funny... Peace, love and (still laughing) ~#6-
| Posted on 2005-02-08 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]

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