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    dots Submission Name: what is love (final draft)dots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 250
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    love
    Is there such a thing.
    Is it just a word

    There might not be a true love for every one
    but there always one hating you.

    so much hatred in this world
    no one can get along

    I still want to know what is love
    I know what love isn't
    love isn't
    when a parent
    picks her lover over
    her first son.
    All I can say I deal with a ton
    I guess Im not your son
    why not agree and move on

    I still want to know what love is
    Is it when your girl friend wants to have sex
    or is it when some one cares about you
    and is there when you need it
    instead of that knife waiting there for me to end this.
    Then may be some one will love me.

    Is love
    When you can't wait till the next day to see them
    even if it life gets tough and you want to grab that knife.

    Maybe love is all around us
    and we don't pay attention to it.
    Yet we say no one love us.
    pity is the number diseases in this country.

    Is love
    When your friend is going out with this girl
    and you now it should be you.
    Or is that just more evidence that love doesnt exist.

    Love is unknown
    and no ones know what love is.




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