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    dots Submission Name: Crocodile Tears Made Realdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 40
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I'm dedicating this to Magnicat since she urged me to submit this and to Nansofast because I love her and just wanted to dedicate something to her.


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    dotsCrocodile Tears Made Realdots
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    He worked in the zoo
    where between feedings
    he clandestinely collected crocodile tears
    that he arranged on oilcloth
    with an eye dropper
    into crystalline patterns
    and immortalized in photographs
    that pulled drops of genuine sadness
    from viewers' eyes.




    Submitted on 2005-02-08 21:37:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      what an unusual poem. sorry i'm commenting on a flurry of your poems- but i am genuinely interested in your perspectives... your poetry is no dreamy, nor is it dark- it is some sort of not-so-happy medium that i can't quite describe. this piece is very unordinary- not something i would ever think to see a poem about. thanks for the read! *md*
    | Posted on 2005-03-12 00:00:00 | by MerryDeath | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with magnicat, this is so unique! Not that many people would think about crocodile tears and here you make it work out so good. My favorite line of course has the alliteration in it,
    "He clandestinely collected crocodile tears."
    I like the fact that you said "pulled drops" instead of saying tears again. It's a different way to say it. ;) Well duh or you wouldn't have wrote it! Anyway, you did a beautiful job. You made me said in just reading about the crocodile tears. ;) Great job!
    -blt
    | Posted on 2005-02-09 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      I love you too, sweet lady. Yes, this has a crystalline healing inside a tiny package. I like how he makes pictures and they convey the sadness of crocodile tears. I think of them as large, a force that bursts forth from the eyes. That image is very poignant and works well with this write. And he knows they are healing, that fits so well. And you are loved, thanks for caring about us. I think we're fine, blessings,
    sweet Amy for thinking of Cat and me.
    Love and Hugs,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-02-09 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      yes! i'm so glad you posted this. it is so unique, which is not surprising from you. i love the thought of this guy sneaking around in the night, collecting tears from the crocodiles to use for his art pieces... just such a great visual. i like the contrast of the crocodile tears with the genuine ones that the croc ones bring forth. one of my favorite parts of the movie Cold Mountain is when Ruby Dues says, "if i cried one tear for that man, i stole it off a dead crocodile."

    just great, cuddle! you rock so with your funky mind and the places it goes to!
    | Posted on 2005-02-08 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, my dear you are truly gifted. Short and sweet like all great poets should be. Collecting tears for sadness to remain forever intangled. And the animals themselves crying and the viewers also shredding tears for the un-escapable truth that no matter what sadness is always there to preveil. But without sadness can anyone truly enjoy what little tastes for happiness we experience?

    Semper Fidelis,
    Christopher
    | Posted on 2005-02-08 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]
      whoooaaa!

    this is so not you but then of course it is, I mean who else could pull off a minimilist thing like this, but it's not you because there is usually a relationship issue and this lacks that. (beat) Or does it?

    The guy collects crocodile tears, arranges them as photographs (probably exposing the causes of the tears) that in turn cause all who see them to cry...k...

    well hell, that "guy" could be you...that's what you do. You take painful things and expose them in a way that effects us all.

    So, nice autobiography!

    did I just come full circle on this or what?

    Man, I wish I could put the nerd guy from yahoo IM here right now...I'm such a dork.
    | Posted on 2005-02-09 00:00:00 | by deadndreaming | [ Reply to This ]


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