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    dots Submission Name: Bloody Tearsdots
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    Author: metalman_21
    ASL Info:    17/m/NE
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 30/42/17
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Broken
    Total Views: 709
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 922



    Description:
       I recently started a band and this is our first single (basically). It's catchy once you hear it, and we're almost done profesionally recording it, so if you want a copy of the cd, just ask.


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    dotsBloody Tearsdots
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    Verse1:
    Watch her cry bloody tears,
    contemplating all her fears.
    She blames the world, for her life,
    as she wait for her demise.

    Chorus:
    What you see, you cannot unsee.
    It was your love.
    Start to bleed.
    Love disapated.
    Now you see,
    her die from dusk till dawn.

    Verse2:
    Watch the pills drop to the floor.
    She couldn't take this world anymore.
    Pupils wide as the full moon.
    She has just sealed her tomb.

    (Chorus)

    Breakdown:
    Now,
    she dies.
    Bloodied, and broken,
    left for dead.
    Now,
    we see,
    the sheltered, existance,
    of tomorrow!.

    Verse 1b:
    Watch her cry bloody tears,
    contemplating all her fears.
    She blames the world for her life,
    as she reaches for the knife...




    Submitted on 2005-02-09 00:11:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i do like the write and i would like the copy. tell me how to get it and how much it would cost. and i'll tell you where to send it and i'll send you the money.
    love tina
    | Posted on 2005-02-09 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]


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