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    dots Submission Name: "ALL THE PAIN IN SODOMY"dots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 539
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 634
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I really don't have any ideas what the hell this is about, so please just thoughts and the answer is NO!


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    dots"ALL THE PAIN IN SODOMY"dots
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    circumcized.........
    - inststutionalized.......
    -then de-humanized.
    -numbing me untill
    -there was nothing left......
    nothing original.
    -De-fragmentation
    of my youth.......
    a castration.......
    of every contemplation.
    stealing my ability to choose.

    -I try and cry,
    I'm no longer alive....
    For inside they raped me....
    and took my will to survive.
    -For what they did to me....
    -did to to my mind...
    everyday all the time.
    -17436
    thats my name in a place like this
    -The medicine...a kiss
    corrupt intervention......like piss
    no more injections.....
    just limp falic erections.....
    -They have taken It all...
    A bone dry sodomy........
    How Ironic?
    now they are inside of me...
    ----------I/I---------I-----------I<-------------I=--------




    Submitted on 2005-02-09 01:49:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ouch..this is a touchy subject... it is a very meaningful writing tho... my heart cries out for this poor person who this happened to... i can see that it is from a first person point of view, and it is so understandable how this person doesnt want to live after being violated to such a degree that it consumes your mind and you cant think about anything else... A great writing in which your views and expressions are clearly stated...Good job.
    .Caleb.
    | Posted on 2005-02-09 00:00:00 | by Exquisite_Death | [ Reply to This ]
      tough subject
    the topic is very real
    the narrative sounds sounds like the source

    if it was to be revised it could take away from the doped up image a known experience like that might have
    hope its fiction for you

    by the way is the sodomy a metaphor as to what could be described only as what a feeling it might be to be on the flight deck

    paulie d

    | Posted on 2005-02-09 00:00:00 | by paulie d | [ Reply to This ]
      This is great! I mean im not some freak obsessed with the falic or anything, but this poem has real edge. I love what you've done with the formatting, because everything sort of leans one way and then the next. It made me want to real more of your stuff which can only be good right? also what more do you want than people to want to read on? Hooked...
    ellisa
    | Posted on 2005-02-09 00:00:00 | by ellisa | [ Reply to This ]


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