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    dots Submission Name: Lonelinessdots
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    Author: Rainmaker
    ASL Info:    23 / M / Finland
    Elite Ratio:    4.84 - 45/50/19
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
    Total Views: 898
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 945



    Description:
       Just some half-lyrics about things that could happen to everyone of us...


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    dotsLonelinessdots
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    If loneliness was all i would be dead long ago
    my heart ripped out of my pale greyish skin
    I'm the one who walks in shadows of a fire
    if loneliness was all i can not live anymore
    if loneliness was all my heart burning would have frozen

    Run run, they are gone
    nothing to be done
    Family, brothers, sisters
    mom and dad - all dead

    I still carry on my heart frozen to the world of hate!
    Why did He do this Whats the punishment for! I declare a mighty WAR!
    If loneliness was all I can not live anymore
    If loneliness was all my heart burning would have frozen

    Run run, they are gone
    Nothing to be done
    Family, brothers, sisters
    mom and dad - all dead

    Its the end
    My journey
    It is over!
    But why -
    I still walk in here
    These paths so gray
    Paths of ashes...




    Submitted on 2005-02-09 13:09:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is such [censored]. you have put me through more pain than you could posibly know just by posting this and my accidental reading of it. i hate you personally.
    | Posted on 2005-02-09 00:00:00 | by lukewarm | [ Reply to This ]


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