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    dots Submission Name: My Teardrops are Raindots
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    Author: Silencer
    ASL Info:    25/m/AL
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 52/66/29
    Words: 220
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
    Total Views: 860
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1343



    Description:
       Just something I wrote up earlier today while I was playing guitar.


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    dotsMy Teardrops are Raindots
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    Weather man said it's rain all week.
    Standing on the doorstep she breaks it to me.
    I heard him in the house and all I wanted was a peak.
    No look, just goodbye how in the hell could this be?

    So, tonight I walk alone.
    Tonight I run away.
    Tonight I toss my phone.
    Tonight I kneel in the rain and pray.

    A heart's broken in a hundred pieces.
    Not hers or his it's a mine o' mine.
    Now my eyes are closed up and my heart seems it ceases.
    How could it beat on, knowin' that yesterday it all seemed fine.

    So, tonight I walk alone.
    Tonight I run away.
    Tonight I toss my phone.
    Tonight I kneel in the rain and pray.

    It hurts so bad it doesn't seem real.
    I'm so covered up with emotions but the one that sticks out is the pain.
    This is something I didn't think I could feel.
    And tonight my tear drops are rain.

    So, tonight I walk alone.
    Tonight I run away.
    Tonight I toss my phone.
    Tonight I kneel and pray.

    I want you to hear me say,
    tonight I kneel and pray.
    Tonight, all there is to feel is pain.
    Oh yea.

    Just for tonight.
    My tear drops are rain.




    Submitted on 2005-02-09 20:13:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      again, another wonderful piece. as i was reading through i found myself finding the rhythm of it. i think i almost started singing. lol. i think my favorite part would have to be the chores and the last stanza.
    wonderful, yet again.

    Rain
    | Posted on 2005-02-10 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
      these are good lyrics. don't let anyone critique your structure, cause poetic structure and lyrics often don't mix. i'd definitely be curious how those longer lines play out musically. an extra measure or a slower one? oh, and run back thru it, you have some spelling errors. well done. btw, the first and last lines are a very very good beginning and ending.
    | Posted on 2005-02-09 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]


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