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    dots Submission Name: A Woman's Travelsdots
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    Author: Memphis
    ASL Info:    21/f/Right Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.13 - 130/158/31
    Words: 384
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 322
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    Bytes: 2452



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    dotsA Woman's Travelsdots
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    One plain day the Woman awoke
    At 4:56 am to be precise.
    A spice filled west wind swept through the room
    It picked her up and willed her away.

    She walked down the street
    Her jeans hanging low on her hips,
    Fingers jammed deep into her pockets.
    A beggar man shook his dirty coffee cup
    “Does a Lady have spare to change?”
    “Hasn’t anyone told you that 18 year-olds aren’t ladies?”
    She threw a fifty into his cup and walked away.

    One day as she stepped off a train
    A man standing on the platform
    Professed his undying love for her
    She laughed and walked away
    “I’m only 24, I don’t Love.”

    Later in the night she walked into a bar
    And laid eyes on a Man with an air about him.
    He asked if they’d met before
    And gawked at her breasts.
    She decided it was Love.

    Six months later, under a Holy Man’s decree
    They became Woman AND Man.
    “Life is Good,” she said to herself at 25.
    At least the consummation was.

    Years arrived and left.
    On their way through the neighborhood
    They dropped off Boy and Girl
    Who were a joy
    When the labor was ignored.

    Man would come home late at night
    Spewing cheap perfume and cigarette smoke.
    The television was her sole companion
    While she waited for him at night
    All the while wondering where she had gone wrong.
    After all, the seamstress confirmed that her measurements
    Remained stable at 36-24-35.

    One day after a day at the mall
    Woman came home to find Man
    In the arms of not one
    But two others!
    She huffed and puffed
    And swore she’d blow the house down.

    “But honey I Love You,” Man begged.
    She sneered then laughed then cried.
    “Honey,” she replied,
    “You wouldn’t know love if it were an ample
    bosomed woman stripping for you.”
    And that was the end of that.

    Boy came home one night
    Declaring his nearing nuptials.
    He would marry a woman he met at the bar
    After the woman at the train station broke his heart.
    Girl declared she was leaving tomorrow.
    The spice filled west wind needed company.

    That night the FAMILY slept under one roof.
    Woman, Man, Boy, Girl.




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