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    dots Submission Name: "INGROWN"dots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 656
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1241



    Description:
       I've gotten comfortable with letting others figure it out for themselves.


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    dots"INGROWN"dots
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    I've been confused...
    I've excepted my fate....
    I've elected to be used......
    and gotten well acustomed to this state.....

    I've grown up...
    I've slept in.........
    I've thrown up........
    and I've cum in..........

    I've grown sad...
    I've grown tired.....
    I've gotten mad.........
    and I've been less than admired....

    I've grown tired....
    I've grown sick.........
    I've gotton really wired......
    and I've become quite a dick.....

    I've been last....
    I've been first.......
    I've smoked alot of hash.....
    and I've smoked alot worse..........

    I've had many a fight....
    I've been in love.............
    I've been dis-liked..............
    and I;ve been dumped.............

    I've grown to admire my shame........
    I've shown I love to sin...................
    I've already taken the blame............
    and Oh, how I've changed within.~L.t

    L A M E M A N S T E R M S




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      the only thing i dont really like are all the ...'s it seems a bit distracting for me. i DO like however how you have put forth the less than perfect part of you. when i first pulled the page up and auto seen all the I've's i kinda though Oh No...but it actually works quite well with this. oh, and on a more serious note, do you happen to have any pictures of you standing naked in the rain ~ i wanna see~ lol
    | Posted on 2005-02-10 00:00:00 | by SilentWhisper | [ Reply to This ]


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