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    dots Submission Name: Nightmare??? Obliv....dots
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    Author: Silver20G
    ASL Info:    28/M/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 158/109/25
    Words: 237
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       Yes it is part of that Dream??? Nigh... poem


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    dotsNightmare??? Obliv....dots
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    It appeared again this temple of mine.
    My face retreats to a grin when it dances
    in the back of my mind.
    I kept myself calm so no one could see the truth.
    My heart starts to pound and my essence breaks loose.
    My control starts to fade and my mind is recluse.
    I canít believe after all this time the same dream
    still sends shivers down my spine.
    It felt like someone was sitting on my chest.
    Squeezing my lungs and stealing my breath.
    It happened so fast, and slowly crept the pain.
    My defense broken I was so shamed.
    I could not wake up I was stuck in its grip.
    My strength not enough to recall my consciousness.
    As I got closer to the temple, I reached for a touch.
    My throat filled with dust, my blood began to rush,
    I could not remember where my courage
    had been tucked.
    In my mind, I conceded defeat;
    until my love awakened from her sleep.
    With a Shake of my shoulders and my name on her lips, she pulled me from darkness just before I slipped. Whenever I think about it my face retreats to a grin,
    for part of me will forever be lost to that crushing black oblivion.




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      this was an interesting and good write, what i got from it was a nightmare that you can't quite shake loose, whether it be literal or not, i often times find myself so wrapped up in a dream or moment, even if it is so terrifying or bad, that i for some reason want to linger on in hopes of something good happening but thankfully there are those who love us and shake us awake to reality and the light, the good moments, i applaud ur poem here. superbly written.

    peace v

    ren
    | Posted on 2008-09-29 00:00:00 | by Renada | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm running out of original things to say about your poetry. I can't keep saying "very good" and "excellent" because they just don't seem to describe how good they really are. I really enjoy your poetry and I hope that you continue to use your talent for my reading pleasure!
    | Posted on 2005-02-10 00:00:00 | by omnipotent | [ Reply to This ]
      Bravo for being able to describe your nightmare and your vulnerable side in a straightforward honest way. Its truly sad when I here people who can't seem to shake their nightmares forever it seems like. Though I must say you are blessed to have a g/f who love over powers the nightmare.

    I like storytelling type poetry.

    Very good write
    | Posted on 2005-02-10 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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