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    dots Submission Name: ex-wife bad, new wife gooddots
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    Author: BenCollier
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 425/386/88
    Words: 49
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       The disdain of sex of years with the wife. The reawakening of lust provided by my nurturer.

    For Felicia


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    dotsex-wife bad, new wife gooddots
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    Fornicating the ashes
    Fellatio of lies
    Congress the patter
    The passion dies

    Coital curdling
    Ejactulatorial heaves
    Extinguishes esteem
    The passion bereaves

    Copulatorial slavery
    Intimacies adrift
    Cunnilingual acidicies
    The passionís remiss

    Exultation renewed
    Dulling the thorn
    Rebirth of desire
    The passions reborn





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      For me the purity of the new wife would be better made example of if not compared to the ex. Though there is blunt honesty in bringing the two together this way I hope it is a short season and your sights are set on the efforts of maintaining the sanctity of marriage. As a lover of Christ i am certain that this will be so. I agree that the use of vocabulary and alliteration as well as a comparative structure indeed makes you a good writer. Considering this is several years back im sure things are different and all the thought and light is on you and your current other half. Happy days to you and yours. May you cherish and cleave to one another and refresh the spirit within.
    | Posted on 2015-09-28 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      To reitterate the things already said in these comments, I enjoy your use of rarely-used vocabulary in as much as it acredits your sense of emotion in writing this piece. I also agree with Stolie77 in that this is truly original. I feel badly because I am unable to give you the praise you deserve for your work here.

    Thanks for a great read,
    Bijou
    | Posted on 2005-04-02 00:00:00 | by Bijou de Mort | [ Reply to This ]
      The words are a little overwhelming to someone with a vocabulary like mine. Heh. It actually makes it easier to understand though. You are a really good poet. I hope one day to be able to reach your level. Keep writing. Please! Also, I love how the title is like a cave man, but the actual poem is extremely expanded vocabulary. Did you use a dictionary or something? ;)
    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by Areinaka | [ Reply to This ]
      Fornicating the ashes -> why fornicating...
    glad u got rid of the old wife if she was such a pain.. nice diction..effectively used
    | Posted on 2005-03-24 00:00:00 | by neonlights | [ Reply to This ]
      well...this was different and if you dont mind my saying so...someone would almost have to wear a condom to read this but hey it was good...and really meaningful and i hope that everything works out wonderful for you...seeing as how it kinda is...
    -sweet
    | Posted on 2005-02-16 00:00:00 | by sweet-fire | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey. I don't undertsand none of those big words you are using. I will look them up and read the poem again. It has a nice flow to it though. Thanks for the vocab lesson.
    | Posted on 2005-02-10 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      very very original, i liked this a lot! the words used were marked by your new sense of lust. lol very obvious that she had indeed compelled you to write as a new man. with a new insight on how relationships are meant to be.

    nice
    | Posted on 2005-02-10 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
      Extremely unique because you use sex words metahphors to regengerate a renew passion after many years of anti-climaxing.

    excellent write
    | Posted on 2005-02-10 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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