For me the purity of the new wife would be better made example of if not compared to the ex. Though there is blunt honesty in bringing the two together this way I hope it is a short season and your sights are set on the efforts of maintaining the sanctity of marriage. As a lover of Christ i am certain that this will be so. I agree that the use of vocabulary and alliteration as well as a comparative structure indeed makes you a good writer. Considering this is several years back im sure things are different and all the thought and light is on you and your current other half. Happy days to you and yours. May you cherish and cleave to one another and refresh the spirit within.
To reitterate the things already said in these comments, I enjoy your use of rarely-used vocabulary in as much as it acredits your sense of emotion in writing this piece. I also agree with Stolie77 in that this is truly original. I feel badly because I am unable to give you the praise you deserve for your work here.
The words are a little overwhelming to someone with a vocabulary like mine. Heh. It actually makes it easier to understand though. You are a really good poet. I hope one day to be able to reach your level. Keep writing. Please! Also, I love how the title is like a cave man, but the actual poem is extremely expanded vocabulary. Did you use a dictionary or something? ;)
well...this was different and if you dont mind my saying so...someone would almost have to wear a condom to read this but hey it was good...and really meaningful and i hope that everything works out wonderful for you...seeing as how it kinda is... -sweet
very very original, i liked this a lot! the words used were marked by your new sense of lust. lol very obvious that she had indeed compelled you to write as a new man. with a new insight on how relationships are meant to be.