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    dots Submission Name: He's Differentdots
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    Author: elitegundam
    ASL Info:    25/M/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 68/90/20
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 260
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    Description:
       I thought up a few lines of this poem while waiting for my girlfriend. After thinking about those lines for a few hours I came up with the theme for the poem. What do you think of it?


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    The noose around his neck felt tight,
    gasping, panting, he tried to breathe.
    The rope pulled tighter against his throat.
    Nobody wanted to free him from bondage.
    Freedom, unreacdhable, sat ten feet away,
    where a man lazily sat in his comfortable chair,
    relaxing, taking a sip of his ice cold beer,
    unwilling to grant freedom to someone who's 'different'.
    The rope starts to burn, rubbing raw flesh.
    The smeltering heat and unbearable sun,
    no water to comfort a dried throat,
    no food to pacify a rumbling stomach.
    The hours grew longer, days turned to nights,
    the days painstakingly took their time turning to weeks.
    It felt like forever he'd been tied up like this,
    all because he wasn't the same, he's 'different',
    And now, I must ask you, as much as it hurts,
    Is this the treatment that a dog deserves?




    Submitted on 2005-02-10 08:46:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      aww...that is so sad! i love dogs and i would prolly kill someone over one. i love the way you wrote it. made it sound as if it were a person and then twisted it in the end. that was great. poems like that usually always turn out really good. really good insight to. creative. you must have a wild imagination! good work.
    -sweet
    | Posted on 2005-02-10 00:00:00 | by sweet-fire | [ Reply to This ]
      And we call them man's best friend. I don't think I have read a poem about animal rights before. I like the way it was presented and ended. If I had a dog I wonder about chaining him up, but alas they are not allowed here.
    | Posted on 2005-02-10 00:00:00 | by Silver20G | [ Reply to This ]
      well tug at my heart strings why dont you! as an animal LOVER, i find the content so terribly sad, and from a writing stand point i find the way in which you portrayed this incredible. i also think this poem has additional layers that could be interpreted differently, and in more of a racism aspect with the way that slaves were treated. in both ways truely a touching poem to me. thanks for the read!
    | Posted on 2005-02-10 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
      well this is different a poem about a dog being tied up,lol Hey it great though, I love to read off the wall stuff, no dogs deserve better life then what was written in this poem. And believe me some dogs get treated far better than thier spouses at time.

    good write
    | Posted on 2005-02-10 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      i read this thinking it was about a person and when I read the last line and found it was a dog i was sadend,alough it sounds a little hush I was more upsaet to find it was a dog.as amimals ask only to be loved and are completly helpless.I think it is so crul to torment a dog and I will never understand animal crulety.great poem and well wrtten.take care,Jamie.
    | Posted on 2005-02-10 00:00:00 | by korn9426 | [ Reply to This ]



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