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    dots Submission Name: Half-moon Smilesdots

    Author: Emma_closes
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 88/111/44
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I've been sort of poetically inactive- so I figured I'd post an older poem for kicks and giggles.

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    dotsHalf-moon Smilesdots

    Undressing half-moon smiles,
    within your garish blue,
    smearing from your eyes,
    losing pieces straight from you.
    Trailing like fresh ink,
    intwining with a tear-drop,
    ending on the page,
    too imbued to stop.
    But is this paper new?
    Or has it just been shined,
    flawless as before,
    with the words I once combined.
    These simple half-moon smiles,
    are hiding nothing now,
    my head is always split,
    but I do what it will allow,
    and though it's paper-thin,
    and it has been washed away,
    it's one more masqurade,
    and that means one more day.

    Submitted on 2005-02-10 10:22:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Now this one is different then the others. Are you sad or meloncholy? Your mind is split due to what?Which side is winning. Are you looking at yourself in the moonlight? Are you writing a letter or reading a letter? I'm ignorant to this write emma. I am sorry...Not saying I do not like it. I just need the emotion behind it broken down for me. pm me to help me understand.
    | Posted on 2005-02-11 00:00:00 | by smalltown | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is really descriptive. It really paints a picture in my mind. IThe only thing is I think it's supposed to be a metephore for something else but i really didnt get it.
    | Posted on 2005-02-10 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]

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