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    dots Submission Name: BE YOUdots
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    Author: Dana
    ASL Info:    23/F/Dreamland
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 79/87/26
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsBE YOUdots
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    Sick and tired
    Of being who you are?
    Itís time to grow up
    To see yourself in a mirror
    Discover your own true world
    Time to be real
    Without a mask, take it off
    You donít need it any more
    Escape being nobody,
    Donít be something
    Be somebody
    Someone who loves
    The world of miracles
    Lose the existence
    Of facades and games
    Live the life with true joy
    Whatever happens it has the reason
    Why it goes like this for you
    Take it easy and try to see the life
    In colours and lights
    Be ready to stand out
    Breath some air for your soul
    Live your own life, have your own goals
    Youíre done with playing a part
    Now youíre breaking free
    Don't care what the crowd says
    You are becoming YOU!

    © by DANA 2005




    Submitted on 2005-02-10 14:24:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      *sings* 'be you, do what you do, dr. pepper' sorry... that stupid jingle popped into my head. this read very quickly- and it's a rather nice note of encouragement to any teenager who might happen to read this, fumbling with identity and who they are and who they are going to be... there are some words that could be omitted, and some places where words could be added, but just simple connector verbs and things like that to make it a smoother read. it was pretty smooth to begin with, but i got caught up a few times toward the end. anyhow, thanks for the read- take care - *md*
    | Posted on 2005-03-07 00:00:00 | by MerryDeath | [ Reply to This ]
      again you succeed to express yourself. this kinda reminds me of the book i'm reading at the moment, //sofie's world// ever read it? well, you should. it starts with this girl, sofie, finding a letter in her mailbox saying """who are you?""" and blablabla. so this was somehow a """who are you?""" letter. you know? stop playing games and having roles, take of your masks and be YOU. kinda philosophy. you know. something. yay. tea<3
    | Posted on 2005-02-21 00:00:00 | by _taateli_ | [ Reply to This ]
      this is so refreshing to see someone writing about being yourself. you usually see someone talking about the mask they could never take off and so on. this is a very simple piece with such an important meaning. being yourself is the only person to be!
    | Posted on 2005-02-10 00:00:00 | by SilentWhisper | [ Reply to This ]


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