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    dots Submission Name: Thank You for It Alldots
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    Author: TDALBH
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 63/57/15
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 667
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    Description:
       This I wrote today. I know it's not good, but I'm at a loss for what to do, and when I get lost I just put things in places, hopeing for someone to say something that might help me. Thanks for reading. I hope you read more of my stuff later or something. Thank you all.


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    dotsThank You for It Alldots
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    Thank you
    For leaving me behind
    For making me watch you go
    For leaving me to freeze

    Thank you
    For being here for me
    If only for a while
    And only when it suits you

    Thank you
    For making me realize
    More then ever befor
    That cold is all I live for

    Thank you
    For delivering me
    Into the icy arms
    Of lost and lonely

    Thank you
    For living
    For telling me you cared
    For making me see the lies

    Thank you
    For making me walk behind
    For putting me in my place

    Thank you
    For listening to me
    Even if your heart wern't true

    Thank you
    For all the lies
    You've put me through

    Thank you
    For making me see
    I can't help but love you




    Submitted on 2005-02-10 16:28:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it. I don't know why really, it just said something to me. I really like the part:

    Thank you
    For making me realize
    More then ever befor
    That cold is all I live for

    I liked this part because I am empty and cold on the inside. I haven't cried in almost a year and a half. I also really liked the pert:

    Thank you
    For making me see
    I can't help but love you

    I guess because there are those people out there that you wish you could hate but you can't help love them. Well it was good.
    | Posted on 2005-02-12 00:00:00 | by ForsakenAngel | [ Reply to This ]
      Love the sarcasm. Sounds like something I would write. Kinda like, 'thanks for never being there for me, ya punk!' You should give this to the person that made you feel that way. Cuz they probly don't know the effect they had on you and your feelings and your life... that's what I would do. Let them know and maybe, just maybe, they will feel bad about it. Ya know? My suggestion would be to maybe combine a few of the stanzas. Not have so many Thanks Yous. That way it won't drag on for too looooong. The first stanza was the strongest, and my favorite.
    | Posted on 2005-02-10 00:00:00 | by WaxingPoetic | [ Reply to This ]
      It was nice to see someone else feels what I feel right now as well,I am getting sick of the love love love Fuk it-Anyway you forgot the "e" in before and I think you meant to writ e "even if your heart "WASN'T true instead of werent -and the next to last stanza I would wipe out completely, you see you already painted the picture with even the srtanza before alone . There is no need for it.. Either get rid of that or the one before that , one of them should be omited -Just an opinion GOOD ONE THOUGH, I really ebnjoyed it- L.t
    | Posted on 2005-02-10 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. were you being a [censored] that day?? or just so fed up with [censored] that no one could stop you?? did you make your voice heard, cause you did hear. Do the people you know listen to you, cause if you said half the [censored] you say here to them, they'd listen.

    fav part:

    Thank you
    for making me see
    I can't help but love you

    Wisdom
    | Posted on 2005-02-23 00:00:00 | by darkwisdom623 | [ Reply to This ]


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