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    dots Submission Name: It Rhymes With Witchesdots
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    Author: Spin-A-Tale
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 23/39/9
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsIt Rhymes With Witchesdots
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    Absinthe tainted lips told their lies,
    hurtful declarations for all to hear.
    “Regurgitated bullshit” somebody cries,
    “your target I’ll no longer wear”.
    Stepping on toes is the height of deceit,
    mastered only by the coldest of hearts.
    The practitioner’s, impossible to entreat,
    feel their infliction is one of the arts.
    They may not bunch up in covens and yet
    I’m sure a broomstick is not far away,
    embrace one for long; see the infection you get
    more than penicillin is the price you will pay.




    Submitted on 2005-02-10 19:12:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Tahts what I call spill'n it out and say'n what ya mean. Nothing wrong with that. Enjoyed the read...
    !Doc~
    Now I have to type something so this damn thing will let me post what I wanted to say...
    Sorry1
    | Posted on 2005-02-13 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, you're really pissed at her! good emotional tone-the anger holds strongly throughout. good strong ending too-i like the last line.
    | Posted on 2005-02-11 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      I like how it's both quite original in the content, and old school in the form. It's tidy, rhythmic, rhyming, very regular but the wording is what you'd expect of a poem tat doesn't care about forms and rhyming and metrum, etc.
    I get the feeling that you've worked quite thoroughly on that one, but I might be wrong. Anyways, it's quality work.
    | Posted on 2005-02-11 00:00:00 | by the apocrypha | [ Reply to This ]


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