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    dots Submission Name: Chin Up (TakeItLikeAWoman2)dots

    Author: Lady Tragedy
    ASL Info:    15/F/Not Where You Are
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 87/66/14
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 844
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       Whoa, I had to squeeze that title in there. Anyway, this is a "second part" to my previous poem "Take It Like A Woman" because a lot of the people who commented on that thought I should have written a happy ending. Though I know that there aren't many things that end happily, I have decided to write this. If you haven't read "Take It Like A Woman," I STRONGLY urge you to read that before you read this, even if you don't comment on that one. Bye lovelies!

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    dotsChin Up (TakeItLikeAWoman2)dots

    Those flowers were so beautiful
    But every flower wilts
    You can scatter them along my grave...
    ... To relieve you of your guilt.

    The women at the potluck
    Applauded my decision
    No more sympathetic glances...
    ... No more helpless disposition.

    This is how I'll function
    I knew someday I could
    Demand my respect...
    ... The way a woman should.

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      your first stanza is overwhelming. beatiful flowers wilt to be scattered on your grave to relieve guilt, very good, i read this with a slight pause before the foourth line of every stanza, this worked nicely, definately two different emotions in these two writes, this one is almost liberating
    | Posted on 2005-02-16 00:00:00 | by brokenbatman | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey that was great- you’re 14? Sweet- awesome job. You rule! That was downright pretty. Peace, love and sydeways corn- ~#6-
    | Posted on 2005-02-11 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]
      Like chocolate and vanilla ice cream on the same cone, You did a great job of weaving the two poems together,though they are great separating like chocolate and vanilla ice cream.

    I also think this poem will help awaken women who actually accept flowers for bruises, bravo for helping out.

    For being 14, you are way ahead of the game of life. You should be so proud of yourself with your poetry and who and what you are about. I know I am.

    Excellent write
    | Posted on 2005-02-11 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. Okay, I read this, then I went back to read the first one, then I came back to re-read this one, and I liked 'em both. They both have dark tinges, and flutters of sadness with strong bases. I, personally wouldn't except flowers after someone did that to me. I guess I'd shove those flowers up his ass, and tell him to get a one-way ticket to a pit of everlasting fire and lava, where he can burn eternally. Anyway, nice job.
    | Posted on 2005-02-10 00:00:00 | by Klotho | [ Reply to This ]

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