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Coming of Age (Haiku)


Author: Eagle
ASL Info:    20, M, Australia
Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 22 /48 /18
Words: 16
Class/Type: Poetry /Being a Teen
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A simple Haiku about a youths coming of age (specifically about the day they leave home), where they are now alone and out in the world by themselves, but have a clear view of where they want to go in life..


Coming of Age (Haiku)



One day in a world,
Severed from the roots of youth,
Alone but not lost.




Submitted on 2005-02-10 22:51:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  'but not' presupposes that one is lost to begin with...
'and not' is a spirited proclamation that even with that common misconception, one is not lost and somewhat with an air of triumph head forward into the grown up world.

Very uplifting write!
| Posted on 2009-02-12 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]
  Short and plainly put. I think it is good to step out in the world, we cannot stay contained in a box of childhood forever. However, I do think that the importance of your family will never decrease, family is family and that is that.

Great job, wonderfully written.
~Dan
| Posted on 2007-03-31 00:00:00 | by djtswing | [ Reply to This ]
  I think this is good. I like the positivity in the last line, and I actually like the line, but I think you could have stayed with the theme of roots to be consistant. I think you could really expand upon this piece. But as it is, I understand and appreciate it.
Nicely
| Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]
  Thanks for the reply.

it's nice to have independance, but it's a human necessity to have someone (like family) close by for support.
| Posted on 2005-02-16 00:00:00 | by Eagle | [ Reply to This ]
  Short but sweet, I like it.
I got out on my own when I was 17 and I loved it, I still love it but sometimes I miss the closeness of a family.
| Posted on 2005-02-11 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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