Description: A simple Haiku about a youths coming of age (specifically about the day they leave home), where they are now alone and out in the world by themselves, but have a clear view of where they want to go in life..
Coming of Age (Haiku) -------------------------------------------
One day in a world,
Severed from the roots of youth,
Alone but not lost.
Short and plainly put. I think it is good to step out in the world, we cannot stay contained in a box of childhood forever. However, I do think that the importance of your family will never decrease, family is family and that is that.
I think this is good. I like the positivity in the last line, and I actually like the line, but I think you could have stayed with the theme of roots to be consistant. I think you could really expand upon this piece. But as it is, I understand and appreciate it. Nicely
Submission Name: Coming of Age (Haiku)
