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    dots Submission Name: And When We Crashdots
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    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    23/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 365/459/201
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 940
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 552



    Description:
       About the sweet boy. Montage [haha] of the past week.


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    dotsAnd When We Crashdots
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    Touch me like
    you think I won't
    feel it.
    Let me follow you
    like you won't
    believe it.
    Smile at me
    when I don't
    see it.
    Expect the most from me
    when I can't
    be it.
    Take my heart
    like someone else won't
    claim it.
    Believe me like
    I don't ever
    fake it.
    Think of me
    if you can't
    dream it.
    And when we crash
    crash into me like you
    mean it.




    Submitted on 2005-02-10 23:37:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow...I love this. I've read it like 10 times...every line just makes me want to stop and think for a second. I think about being in love...and this is what it is. It's smiling at the person when they aren't looking and touching them in best kind of way and treasuring their heart and believing them like they'd never lie. Wow...this one really kinda blew me away. It's a fav. Great job. ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      :) Sounds like hip-hop lyrics, which is good.Cool rimes and a very strange flow of cursivity.
    From here i will levitate her(the poetry) on my fav. list.

    DAlin
    | Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by DAlin | [ Reply to This ]
      nice.. I think it will be in my favorite list... I had a freind that told me she knoew that her (now) Husband really loves her when he whispered it into her ear while he thought she was asleep....
    | Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like it...I love the structure. I think I understand what it is supposed to be about...But I'm not totally sure...So I will just think what I think, unless you want to explain it. See ya later!
    | Posted on 2005-02-13 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      this is interseting. i like the structure, but the words lack feeling to me somehow [maybe that's intentional?]. anyway, it's a pretty good write. strong ending too.
    | Posted on 2005-02-11 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]


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