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    dots Submission Name: Beg For Me.dots

    Author: omnipotent
    ASL Info:    17/F/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 82/63/23
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 800
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       IDK...comments plz.

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    dotsBeg For Me.dots

    I feel my heart beat in my stomach.
    I feel I’ve found you.
    But you continue to search for…
    Not I.
    I can only continue to wonder about you.
    About those eyes…
    Those hands…
    Those lips…
    They seem to hold the answer to my mystery.
    What would you say?
    What is it you’d like to say to me?
    For there is plenty I’d like to tell you.
    And there’s plenty I’d like to know.
    I want o hear you voice call my name,
    And beg for me.
    For my heart.
    For something that is already yours.
    And I could only hope…
    That somehow you can see through me.
    Through my words and negative exterior.
    And tell me…
    Tell me that I’m yours.

    Submitted on 2005-02-11 10:25:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      its just all too common.
    Thing about language, think about style, thing about tone, rhythm, rhyming or the lack of it...a million teens write the same poem. dont take me wrong. it has potential but work with it
    | Posted on 2005-02-11 00:00:00 | by neonlights | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm... I'm don't usuealy like sappy poems but this ones good. And I'll admit it does descripe a part of my life... a short one. But any way I like the righting style kinda short lines that make it seem like your mind is raceing and unfocused.
    | Posted on 2005-02-11 00:00:00 | by Rail | [ Reply to This ]
      The poem is so nice, it's like 'please see the real me, see my good qualities, see that I am worthy'. Really romantic. The way you paused after certain lines really complements the poem's structure.
    | Posted on 2005-02-11 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]

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