my dungeon
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this poem is alot like "my closet" but it has a little different messege. i hope it reads well and paints a dark picture in the readers mind. if you like please read my closet because it is like this one. thanks and take care.
my dungeon
My heart is my dungeon Filled with ghost and ghouls Damp, dark, and grey Where I bring my favorite fools Cold Stones and candle light Within your eyes I see it flicker Follow me deeper within Where the walls and shadows whisper The screams can be our love song Within this chamber we can be alone In a bed circled by candles looking into a mirror framed in bone This is where i can keep you Keep you forever and a day Still, meek, and timeless Beautiful and locked within grey My heart is my dungeon Within waits ghosts and ghouls With a charming smile I invite you Where we can be dark romantic fools |
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| A bit like being in love with a psychopath,or having one love you. My heart is my dungeon Within waits ghosts and ghouls With a charming smile I invite you Where we can be dark romantic fools - I found it touching and sweet. Yes,okay,so I am a freak,have always been attracted to tortured souls... A romantic experience I'd want to live! | Posted on 2005-03-12 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ] | Very Gothic,very dark,but romantic all the same. There's also a deeper interpretation,that the 'I' in this piece is afraid to express his feelings for fear of rejection. | | Posted on 2005-03-12 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ] | I really enjoyed this poem. A dark and dangerous love affair. | " The screams can be our love song Within this chamber we can be alone In a bed circled by candles looking into a mirror framed in bone" I find this stanza haunting and beautiful. | Posted on 2005-02-12 00:00:00 | by Rubi_Roja | [ Reply to This ] | Its great, I really enjoyed it. The romance and mystery came together beautifully. Its truly great. Congrats! Keep writing. | Blessed Be! | Posted on 2005-02-11 00:00:00 | by Sarah Leger | [ Reply to This ] | i really, really liked this, especially: | Where the walls and shadows whisper you were right, it does paint a pretty dark picture, but sometimes that is exaclty what the reader is looking for. the title will draw those to it easily. the last line is espically nice. its the inite into your heart, but gives a warning that its not always safe. nice read  | Posted on 2005-02-11 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ] | What a silky smooth dark poem. I dont know if it's my hormones or just the descriptions but...this had a stimulating affect on me. hmmm must be my hormones lol | content wise...the last stanza did break up the rhythm just a tad but still it wasn't bad enough to distract from the beauty. | Posted on 2005-02-11 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ] | THis is a very superb poem flow is lovely but the message is very very strong and powerful. Writers usually are romantic. But is a more dim kind of way. We write from our feelings and live in emotions. Your discriptions are wonderful i could see everything in my mind. i will hopefully read more of yours | Semper Fidelis, Christopher | Posted on 2005-02-11 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ] | |
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