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    dots Submission Name: How Could You?dots
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    Author: wildcatchamps
    ASL Info:    33 Las Vegas
    Elite Ratio:    5.42 - 47/57/34
    Words: 343
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 633
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1896



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    dotsHow Could You?dots
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    How Could The One I Gave My Heart To, Break My Heart So Bad?
    How Could The One Who Made Me Happy
    Make Me Feel So Sad?
    Wont Somebody Tell Me?
    So I Can Understand.

    If You Love Me, How Could You Hurt Me Like That?
    How Could The One I Gave My World To
    Throw My World Away?
    How Could The One Who Said I Love You
    Say The Things You Say?
    How Could The One I Was So True Too, Just Tell Me Lies?
    How Could The One I Gave My Heart To, Break This Heart Of Mine?

    How Could You Be So Cold To Me? When I Gave You Everything.
    All My Love, All I Had Inside.
    How Could you Just Walk Out The Door?
    How Could You Not Love Me Anymore?
    I Thought We Had Forever.
    I Cant Understand.
    How Could The One I Shared My Dreams With Take My Dreams From me?
    How Could The Love
    That Brought Such Pleasure,
    Bring Such Misery?
    Wont Somebody Tell Me?
    Somebody Tell Me Please.

    If You Love Me, How Could You Do That To Me?
    Tell Me
    How Could you Just Walk Out The Door?
    How Could You Not Love Me Anymore?
    I Thought We Had Forever.
    I Cant Understand.

    How Could The One I Gave My Heart To
    Break My Heart So Bad?
    How Could The One Who Made Me Happy
    Make Me Feel So Sad?
    Wont Somebody Tell Me?
    So I Can Understand.
    If You Love Me, How Could You Hurt Me Like That?

    How Could The One I Gave My World To, Throw My World Away?
    How Could The One Who Said I Love You, Say The Things You Say?
    How Could The One I Was So True Too Just Tell Me Lies?

    How Could The One I Gave My Heart To
    How Could The One I Gave My Heart To
    How Could The One I Gave My Heart To Break This Heart of Mine?
    Tell Me




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      Why? Thats always the question that haunts us all. I'll never know why she hates me so much and ye runs back to my arms wih more than lve. I guess it's always the other doing the hurting that is really confused. I feel like slaping them and telling them to wake the [censored] up, You either love me or you don't, either way I'll be here for ou, Love don't have to be so hard. But like I say in one of my poems Love is the death of us all. Good writting I really felt it deep and agree with you on that one.
    | Posted on 2005-02-15 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]
      UNCAPATILIZATION! PLEASE GOD UNCAPATILIZATION!

    It didn't just "bug me." It drove me crazy. I couldn't even try to enjoy this as azreal says "tad bit overused" piece. I think I've heard every one of these rhymes somewhere else. I think you could find a way more original way to say this. This is just one of those "HOW CAN YOU NOT LOVE ME?" Kind of thing. Like Azreal said, "I love you." is just three hollow words which are thrown around. There's a million ways to say this. Even the title is overused.

    Okay, so now I'm being way negative, and being a [censored] in my comment. Forgive me.

    Although, I can totally see this as lyrics. I can see it as number one on the countdowns, because that's what all the songs are about that are number one. I actually almost felt myself finding a tune for this. So... nice read "somewhat."

    -Brooke
    | Posted on 2005-02-11 00:00:00 | by Quiet Clamor | [ Reply to This ]
      Um...wow. I used to feel the exact same way. The idea was a tad bit clichéd. Well, "clichéd" isn't the right word to use...I guess just a little overused, but I still liked this piece. The way I see it, "I love you" is just three hollow words which are thrown around, because in reality there isn't really a "forever" with someone. Every human being dies alone. Maybe that's just me and my negativity, but these lyrics helped confirm my views...in a way. The capitalization of every word kind of bugged me, and you forgot some apostrophes there. But overall, it was a pleasant read...somewhat
    -Azrael
    | Posted on 2005-02-11 00:00:00 | by Tears of Azrael | [ Reply to This ]


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