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Quirky Valentine


Author: thesacredone
ASL Info:    18/F/BK
Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 139 /159 /50
Words: 47
Class/Type: Poetry /Angry
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Description:


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Quirky Valentine



Roses are red,
white and pink too,
the violet bed
is a beautiful blue.
But if I really
had to choose,
I'd pick the flowers
over you.
Cuz your roses are wilted,
like your violet bed,
in fact all around,
I wish you were dead.




Submitted on 2005-02-12 21:06:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Sorry, I saw what Brown commented and had to come over and check it out. Well, this one is definitely interesting. LOL So simple (very simple) Yet so gritty! LOL

Poor guy. With his wilted petals. LOL

Great write. Brought a smile.
| Posted on 2005-03-14 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
  LOL..that one was great. I really do hope you gave that to someone who deserves it. Omgoddess I'm still smiling. Great Job.
Blessed Be!
| Posted on 2005-02-13 00:00:00 | by Sarah Leger | [ Reply to This ]
  lol well I have to say this was a great write.
it was serious in a humours way and I was diggin on it.

I have to say though I had to lol at "Cuz your roses are wilted,
like your violet bed," because I thought of it as a guy having a limp weenie lol sorry if that offends you or others but hey at least I'm keeping it real! ;)

be blessed
bd
| Posted on 2005-02-12 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
  Wait let me check the temperature on this one ... ... ... BURN! Nice job of rewriting something that seemed cliché' into a fantastic piece. If I was on the recieving end of that, I think I would die. Or never show my face. Ever.
Beautiful!
~Paco!
| Posted on 2005-02-12 00:00:00 | by Paconess1006 | [ Reply to This ]
  LMAO I hope you didn't really give someone this for a Valentine, but if you did I just gotta say ...well you sure told them hu?
This was really cute and I enjoyed reading it.
!Doc~
| Posted on 2005-02-25 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]


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