A short but beautiful poem. I can almost feel the sun's warmth just reading it. I'd say; it says that at that particular moment in time you are content just standing in the warm rays...troubles forgotten.
'cloud's seem' should be 'cloud's seam' and it should be burst instead of bursts. I am a nitpicking english major, sorry. nice images in this but I am not sure what you were getting at. someone coming out of darkness? seeing the light?
this poem is very short and brief. U need to be more specific at what you are trying to say okay? Though the ryme scheme is very good, you need to extend on that.
As they say: "poetry is a way of showing your feelings", you haven't actually done that.
Make this poem your own by saying how you feel, so that you can get rid of the imatureness.
Though this is a great poem that does show change and vision. It's cool. just make those minors and you'll be the best!
Submission Name: Sunlight Shimmers Through
