In the distance through the night is a monster in my sight.
He will come and get me soon.
The only witness is the moon.
With opened eyes I stare into the dark.
My pulse races
my heart beats fast.
I hear the voice this night it sings
But maybe it is only the voice of the winds?
It sings me a lullaby of monsters and ghosts
Hoping to save me before it comes close.
I sing along knowing the words
Singing as if it’s a prayer
I know it’s disturbed.
Tonight the evil has not reached my home.
I listen to silence knowing the monsters are gone.
Now sleep my darling tomorrow will come
Until then let the moon be the sun.
I’ll be the light and warmth in your dreams
Let me be the voice that fights all the beasts.
I like the begginning Roja said it pulled you in, and made them want to read the whole thing, I agree.It was compelling, dark, and it sure as hell was chilling.I my favorite part though was: I sing along knowing the words Singing as if it's a prayer... That is really cool, I can practically hear the chanting, the exoctic, exciting, seductive voice of the monsters.Nice job! -Camoflage
oh, nice. I like this one, really compelling and chilling. You did a nice job with the imagery, and writing it as well. Somehow reminds me of Poe (or it might be the fact that I just read a Poe story, lol)
It's a nice poem x3 The rhyming pattern was kind of confusing but overall, good, and I can't get over the fact that I just woke up and I'm thirsty as hell. -random- Whee. :3 Goodjob.
hmm good. this reminds me of last night. a bum approached me and noone else was around. he totally could've killed me. heh. um oh and i like your icon thingy. very true :P well keep writing and stuff. hehe. bye bye
sort of like it was dark, and pleasant at the same time. hmm... not bad. in the 4th stanza, the rhyme seems a little forced, but that's cool, all the others flow. all in all, it's a good piece. it's one of the few that's dark, but not totally dismal... sorta like ur telling someone ur going to protect them from "evil". sorta like a kinght in shining armor trip. and i love ur icon too. keep up the good work.
Beautiful, awesome write! I love it all, i have no criticism, it's a new favorite. This is just such a good write. I mean, the images and flashes i got while reading this, if i could draw them...awesome.
Submission Name: Lullaby
