I've never seen your best. But that was pretty good. I think maybe you should change that to a song, because it's got a lyrical flow to it. It was a decent write, but it just didn't really hit home. Maybe more metaphores, something unique. That just seemed a little routine. Like, what everyone is writing about. I think I do the same thing though. I guess it's an area where we both can improve on . Other then that though, the poem was very good.
So am I Your not really lost Your just misplaced I'm here and ready when you are
The so am I in that kind of...bleh. It ruins it a bit, lose it and it'll be that much better.