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    dots Submission Name: detailsdots

    Author: strangeling
    ASL Info:    22/M/Tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 58/82/59
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    this filth
    it's the last piece of toast,
    buttered-ball scrapings
    that second sip of coffee, strange
    stageing scenes of fake stage fright
    braiding light cords
    with no apparent reasoning
    other than being bored
    a board script
    digging in heels
    just creating namesake arguements
    for the sake of arguement
    as sure shots
    shot in the dark, in he darks shot rang out
    changing patterns
    two small childeren in a blender
    where's the button
    button button,
    trying to find
    but where to find
    the button
    failing to make all things all-clear
    for less fortunate minds
    tiring of these binds
    bound to honor codes and moral designs
    send em the long way
    shoehorning the cape
    the greatest escapades
    are never made into movies
    it's strange
    how the strange's strange brand of truth
    is often stranger than the last man's
    the man who took a strange stand in boots
    he's hacking up blood and lung-butter
    holding guant sides battered by the truth
    did you count the ribs on that skinny fuck?
    strange is still skinny as hell
    won't someone feed me
    fucking hell, won't someone feed me
    dipping and weaving
    bobbing and zagging
    moving targets
    my only aim, is to get better aim

    grazed an ass-cheek

    let's see somebody step shit up.


    Submitted on 2004-03-29 09:02:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is not a good poem....It's an outstanding poem. Stepped it up, yes! I loved the twisting, turning play with words. I love reading clever and high energy stuff!
    | Posted on 2004-03-29 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good poem. I like the lines about the children in a blender, i also liked ..my only aim is to get better aim... that was great
    | Posted on 2004-03-29 00:00:00 | by AmberJade | [ Reply to This ]

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