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Author: Eagle
ASL Info:    20, M, Australia
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Another Haiku about a teenager who finds out that independance isn't all it's cut out to be.


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Fifteen years at home,
Finally out in the world,
Alone, lost, afraid.




Submitted on 2005-02-13 21:07:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Never too early, never too late;
Life can be a heaped-up plate.

Today you are comfy, tomorrow, lost;
Yesterday's loss determines the cost.

The future disguises no blemishes.
Hope's a parachute that never vanishes.

| Posted on 2009-02-11 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]
  Very simple, maybe too much so, expand on your feelings, and play with the words, see what happens, please visit my profile and comment on some of my work, Id really appreciate it
thank you
| Posted on 2007-08-15 00:00:00 | by lynn marsters | [ Reply to This ]
  Thanks for the comment.

That is so true and yet there are more and more cases of teens "going off the rails". (sigh...)

Have a read of Adolescent Anguish. that's a great one and it realy highlights some of society's problems.
| Posted on 2005-02-16 00:00:00 | by Eagle | [ Reply to This ]
  there is nothing so helpless and so dedtitute
as to feel so alone
that you have no place to call home especially teens
| Posted on 2005-02-13 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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