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    dots Submission Name: it's you and only youdots

    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       i think i'm in love expressing my feelings

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    dotsit's you and only youdots

    It's you
    I live everyday
    there's not a day that doesn't go bye and
    I don't think of you
    It's you
    I live everyday
    Your the one who keeps my life going
    It's you
    I live every day
    You're are the one and only one
    I love
    It's you
    I live every day
    You're the one who
    captrued my heart with this love
    It's you
    I live every day
    You satisfy me with your love
    It's you and only you.

    Submitted on 2005-02-13 21:24:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it's repetitious and only repetitious. and for god's sake run a spell check. it's sweet on its face, but the repetiion quickly grows tiresomne b/c i don't see how you feel about this person. 'there's not a day that doesn't go bye and I don't think of you' is a nice sentiment, but it's too abstract for me to relate to. what do you think about? her long, silky raven hair? her deep blue eyes? her t-ts? give us something to go on here. show her [or him, whatever] to us
    | Posted on 2005-02-14 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      thats soooo sweet
    i love it good job on how you wrote this very well writen it so nice being in love...awwww well happy V-day and keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2005-02-14 00:00:00 | by UNunderStood | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought you had a very good style and the poem seemed like it really came from the heart. I hope your right with your feelings that you love this person. Very good write I think we can all relate at some point in time of our lives

    | Posted on 2005-02-14 00:00:00 | by Marbles | [ Reply to This ]
      love sweet and so pure when comes from heart
    god bless you and your life may life never break your heart
    keep writing in your own unique style
    | Posted on 2005-02-13 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]

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