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    dots Submission Name: My Apologydots
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    Author: ares_nuke_1
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 106/151/76
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    Description:
       Iím sorry that I had to revert back to the depressing stuff, but it seems to be the only thing I have the ability to write about these days. This particular poem is the outcome of me being the shyest living person on this planet. My inability to put the extra step forward in the only relationship I have ever had cost me many arguments and then eventually it cost me my girlfriend. This is my Apology to her.


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    I couldnít take the shouting no more
    Thatís why you ran out the door
    I shouldíve stopped you
    I shouldíve told you
    But I couldnít find the words to say
    And now I regret the day you went away

    Iím sorry I couldnít help you
    There simply wasnít anything I could do
    I was lazy
    And I know thatís a shitty excuse
    Will you forgive me
    For what Iíve done to you

    Iíve got nothing left to give
    My heart is empty
    How am I supposed to live
    Baby Iím sorry
    For giving up on you




    Submitted on 2005-02-13 21:41:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the are five words in any language that are the hardest to say..."I love you" and "I'm sorry"

    I for one tend to choke on the latter. It's unfortunate that we let pride get in our way and allow it to destory something that could have been a God send.

    Structure wise on this post it was a bit choppy and your last stanza only had five lines the others had six. but hey if your like me then the closet posts that come straight from your heart probably aren't as smooth as your others. When I get emotionaly involved in my posts they tend to have a weak structure.

    anyhoo I look forward to reading more of your work.
    | Posted on 2005-02-13 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]


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