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    dots Submission Name: Naugh "T"dots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 26
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 970
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 145



    Description:
       Challenge on sunny day
    missing Alpha
    I dare say
    Omega's gone in search
    of her
    in regal church
    Among high clouds flows
    an answer
    only he knows



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    Submitted on 2004-03-29 09:17:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice, but the flow isn't really quite there. maybe if you restructure it, or choose a different word here or there it'll read smoother, take care
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was a very interesting piece and it made me contemplate a lot too. I liked the whole alpha/omega thing. They are just small parts of everything...ya know? Gotta keep em balanced...
    Nice job and keep up the good work.

    Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-04-09 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...this is beautiful...alpha and omega...challenge on sunny day...what a great way to start a poem...i think this might sum up my week more than anything i could write....keep it up
    | Posted on 2004-03-29 00:00:00 | by FallenGrace | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really good. I love "in regal church/Among high clouds flows." Shouldn't there be an "a" before church though.
    | Posted on 2004-03-29 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      An interesting thought...but do the two really ever meet...only in a circle...
    I noticed you tried to add a pic...make sure you do not have http:// in the link blank..the site automatically adds it.
    jan
    | Posted on 2004-03-29 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting and different.................................................................................
    | Posted on 2004-03-29 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]


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