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    dots Submission Name: Trappeddots

    Author: No_purpose
    ASL Info:    17 | Vag. | Pallet Town
    Elite Ratio:    3.64 - 63/47/21
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1399
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       ((Please try to accept the end I didn't know how to end it so yeah....bare with it. I may post this again when I come up with a better ending))

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    Trapped in my mind
    my thought are very cold
    Trapped in a dark place
    my feelings uncontroled
    Trapped in my suffering
    my self inflicted pain
    Trapped in my emotions
    and my very cold ways
    Trapped in my sadness
    these four walls are my friends
    Trapped in my madness
    and this very pleasing pain
    Trapped in my mourning
    and the bloody tears which came
    These are my memories
    which will never go away
    This is the present
    and it will always be the same

    Submitted on 2005-02-14 09:37:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The whole poem went together really well, and every word had a purpose. Throught-out the piece I was thinking about things that happened in my life that really went with this poem. I think a lot of people will be able to relate.
    | Posted on 2005-02-14 00:00:00 | by UnPerfect | [ Reply to This ]
      The ending was a little off, it kind of leaves you hanging. You imagery and flow was pretty good. Good emotion and feeling. Good write.
    | Posted on 2005-02-14 00:00:00 | by omnipotent | [ Reply to This ]

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