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    dots Submission Name: Yesterday-Today-Tomorrowdots
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    Author: omnipotent
    ASL Info:    17/F/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 82/63/23
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 798
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 991



    Description:
       I felt like I was dyslexic when I was writing this poem...I kep confusing all the today's tomorrow's and yesterday's. Enjoy! :)


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    Today I am a writer.
    Tomorrow, if it exists at all, I will be who I was yesterday,
    Immune to what I am today.

    Yesterday, I was relative.
    Today, if it is real, I am who I was yesterday.
    Immune to what I was that day.

    The world spins right past me, and in angry relief, I seem to start after it slower than ever.
    Tomorrow could be a beautiful day.
    A recovery for what happened today.
    Maybe then I could forgive myself for what I cannot today.
    Tomorrow, all it is a brand new today, and today an old yesterday.

    And just when I begin to catch up with today, yesterday seems to hold me back.
    The unsolved mysteries, per say, of that which I have not bothered to make sagacity of seem to come back from the longest yesterdays to wrap me up in old memories I dare not forget.
    Back when I smiled, you told me I was beautiful.
    But those days so rarely reappear.





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    ||| Comments |||
      You really went into it and I could really see what was going on because your description showed it all...yet it was also kind of mysterious.
    | Posted on 2005-02-14 00:00:00 | by UnPerfect | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really deep. All the days in it confused me a lot, so I couldn't make much sense of it. Needs a little more flow to be cohesive enough for other readers
    | Posted on 2005-02-14 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]


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