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St. Valentine is dead

Author: painofthanatos
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Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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St. Valentine is dead

My head is throbbing
I can not think
Breathe in deeply
Begin to sink

A sweet day filled
With hateful things
Strangling lovers
With balloon strings

Being lost,
alone, and scared
The day of love
And no one's there

Hateful words
Fuel angry fights
Another day
Destroyed with spite

Fist fulls of chocolates
Shoved down their throats
By the people who love them
But they laugh when they choke...

Submitted on 2005-02-14 12:01:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  that poem is soooo true valentines day is so overated it is all about love or suposed to be...this dark day drives people insain...just look at me any way great rithim great rhyming this one for my favorites list
| Posted on 2005-02-16 00:00:00 | by yuber1990 | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked it. I mean, for one thing, Valentine's Day in the U.S. is so commercialized that it is DEAD. I mean, think of how much m oney that the big companies make just so they can sell worthless crap to people willing to buy it. I loved the line, "Strangling lovers
With balloon strings."
Also, I think that people should actually know the origin of the day before they celebrate it so heartily. People are consistently ignorant. Don't you think? Godd write.
| Posted on 2005-02-15 00:00:00 | by melancholymaid | [ Reply to This ]
  i think that this poem has said what we all have been waiting for ages to say. its all my cynicism and violence put in words. wtf is valentines day but to make us single people wish we could burn in hell. the part about cramming candy down throats perfectally decribes how i felt. my [censored] god my loverly b/f broke up with me the night before! loved it. truely what ive waited for
| Posted on 2005-02-14 00:00:00 | by hopeless death | [ Reply to This ]
  you are so right. there is a lot of pressure put on v-day but if it wasnt there there would be a whole lost less tears...and isnt that what we all want?
| Posted on 2005-02-14 00:00:00 | by UnPerfect | [ Reply to This ]
  Ouch... From short lines to long lines, very unconventional and original. I have not seen that on this site before. Maybe people are way to commercial with what the you's and me's or he and her's for lack of better terms are about. Or maybe the commercallity, if that is a word, replaced the love with false love in hopes to not hear her naging. Not my view by the way.
| Posted on 2005-02-14 00:00:00 | by Silver20G | [ Reply to This ]
  oooooohhhhh. exactly how i feel. everyday. but most on this great day, i guess. like the visual of the craming of fistfuls of sweet, delicious candy down sweet, delicious people's throat's. Good times, good poem. thanks for sharing.
v-day is just cruel, no??
| Posted on 2005-02-14 00:00:00 | by emilyg | [ Reply to This ]
  This is good, although not your best, but still good. This is very true, I hate when someone tries to ruin a special thing, the should just go and die. Anywho, wonderous job.

| Posted on 2005-02-14 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
  harsh but probably necessary.if valentines is dead,why worry about it?be thankful for your freedom and that you can still shop around if you are so inclined.i can't imagine that any rational person would find the situation that you are in as being completely without options.take it day you might lose your freedom and come to regret it.good luck and fare well.
| Posted on 2005-02-14 00:00:00 | by sickly | [ Reply to This ]

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