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    dots Submission Name: Nightmaresdots

    Author: Pyrosis
    ASL Info:    24/M/TN
    Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 199/204/35
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       this is the first thing i have submitted in a very long time.. hopefully it is as powerful as i wanted it to be.. nightmares usually are..

    i realize that this thought is clouded.. it is meant to be.. i leave things this way for a reason.. maybe another can remember something similar..

    well enjoy it or not.. all in your mind i suppose.. so say what you wish..


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    Why is it whenever the moon ceases to shine the nightmare returns?

    I feel you tear your way forward
    From deep within you return
    Unnoticable are the scars you leave
    Festering wounds filled with sins of the past

    Why do this to me?
    Your voice echoes in my mind as the last breath of a child

    Must she live on like this?
    Is there no other way?

    Let her scream then..
    Let her sing her tale of pain and suffering
    I wrote it..
    It is fitting i am bound to it

    In my nightmares she lives on
    A black figure against the setting sun
    Tears that I can never wipe away stain her eyes

    Ten thousand years of this would not make right what I did
    If only it could..
    Perhaps.. I could dream of another

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      This is the first write that I have ever read by you.....goood job.
    This is very powerful...it speaks to me in ways that you may understand.
    As a person that gets nightmares often.

    Peace and Harmony

    | Posted on 2005-02-14 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a good come-back poem. (so to say) You did a good job and its a real strong one.

    "Why is it whenever the moon ceases to shine the nightmare returns?"

    Thats my favorite line, sets up the whole poem really. Alright..nothin else to really say so I'm outta here, bye!
    | Posted on 2005-02-14 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ]
      this was very powerful real or imagination it was very good we all have ghosts ( CONSIENCE ) who nos but you did a good job of discribing it with good imagery as well great write
    | Posted on 2005-02-14 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      I really hope you don't feel like this. :( This seems to me like a ghost that haunts you. And you can't stop it so all you have to do is accept it. It's good to see you submitting posting! :) I hope to catch you online sometime. Talk like old times. Happy V-day! Good job with this.
    | Posted on 2005-02-14 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]

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