The Black Death by melancholystar

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Submission Name: The Black Death dots

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Author:	melancholystar
ASL Info:	17/f/tx
Elite Ratio:	4.53 - 598/302/32
Words:	84

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
Total Views:	293
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	596

Description:
This isn't a new piece.. but I found the other day in a notebook. I wrote it back in december while at a nation wide speech tournament. I did it in about 10 minutes while I was waiting for them to post the semi finals results. Earlier that week we had learned about the black death in history class and well.. I'm not sure why I was thinking about it at that particular moment.. but I was inspired to write this. Enjoy.

The Black Death dots

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A magnificent brightly illuminated star,
Foretelling the terror to come,
Breaking into individual rays,
Then disappearing from the night sky.

A deathly disease is spread,
Three days is the longest,
Time period you have,
So many people are gone.

They take them out,
By the barrel,
By the cart,
They are no longer mourned.

To die becomes so common,
That they must burn the bodies,
A stench fills the air,
A gray covers the earth,
All the people are gone.

Submitted on 2005-02-14 20:37:40 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow thatas weird cause the only thing i can remember out of history is when our class last year learned about The Black Death. how weird is that.
"A magnificent brightly illuminated star,
Foretelling the terror to come,
Breaking into individual rays,
Then disappearing from the night sky"

those are my favorite lines in this piece. the only thing to nitpick about is you started off with a great discription and essence of wording and them from the 2nd stanza on you became blunt about it all. but its still a nice piece except it started off excellent and died down a bit.
Jessi~
| Posted on 2005-07-30 00:00:00 | by slntfirflm | [ Reply to This ]
  Awesome! Finally someone else who writes about things that have happened in the past, not something that they have been there to see. I have a poem about The Holocaust, that no one really read, we were learning about it and all the things I read had a cool, strange but cool, affect on me. I wrote the poem as if I were there, though I know I couldn't have know the actual pain that those people went through. Oh, dear, it seems I have been rambling on again...I tend to only comment on friends pieces because I have a problem with rambling, and I am not so sure that they even like it.
Anyway, if you find the time would you read End, I would really appreciate it.
Bonnie
| Posted on 2005-02-15 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]
  an interesting piece. I read it three times before I could come up with a decent comment. Not because it is a bad piece but because I had so many things running through my mind. The main thing that sticks ut in my mind is the fact that his piece left me feeling thirsty. I don't just mean in the literal sense (although the fire and ash references made my mouth dry) but in a longing for more kind of way. I felt as though you had a lot more to say on the subject. It seems like a scratch on the surface of the glacier that is this piece. Maybe I'm just reading too much into it or maybe I'm not reading enough into it. Either way I liked this piece. I never have been too good at commenting on subject matter because I believe it's the poet's right to write about whatever they want without being judged for it. Good work.
-Light
| Posted on 2005-02-15 00:00:00 | by Lightbringer | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked it. I agree that if you do not realize the historical aspect, then it would take on a different meaning. I like both meanings. I like that you chose to write about this in such a manner. Your form was nice, and the first line was really good.
| Posted on 2005-02-15 00:00:00 | by melancholymaid | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow this peice is amazing ...honestly ...Certain aspects seem to describe different things to me though ....Mind you ....i didnt read the description until afterwards *lol*
The bodies being burnt and the stench of death reminds me alot of my history teacher in school who managed to bring a holocaust survivor into class one day ...
The first stanza to me seemed like armageddon ...Like the bright star representing Jesus ...or something lalong those lines ..
Anyway ...I know now what the inspriation behind it was...I just thought you might like to hear what my first impressions were....
Fantastic peice ...very powerful :)
| Posted on 2005-02-14 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey there, just checking out some of your work, this reminds me of the holocost. big time, especially with the whole burning bodies thing. i just watched a special on it so it's in my head right now. but i think you wrote this well getting your idea out of your head anyway. nice work**

;)
| Posted on 2005-03-07 00:00:00 | by _winky_ | [ Reply to This ]

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