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    dots Submission Name: Observing Blindlydots
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    Author: majinkenshinamv
    ASL Info:    20/M/Vegas
    Elite Ratio:    7.28 - 70/50/13
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Lyrics/The pain inside
    Total Views: 887
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1015



    Description:
       Another song, not as old as the first, but not too recent either. Just kind of a random thought process I started jotting down and eventually it wrapped up into something I didn't totally hate. Bash it up for me.


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    dotsObserving Blindlydots
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    Consumed by these vivid visions… Not again.
    Enslaved by hatred, learned from you…
    I can’t seem to get a firm grip… Can’t pretend
    It’s slipping
    Always slipping

    Stripped. My wings are on the floor
    And I’m crying at the core.
    But you can’t see me.

    Stripped. The damage has been done
    And you did it all for fun.
    But now I see you

    Lost in this labyrinth of instability
    Stumbling over fear, learned from you.
    My mind retains it’s constant fragility
    It’s slipping
    Always slipping

    Am I…really here?
    How can this…be me?
    When did we…fall from grace?
    Why can’t you…see me?

    It’s slipping, always slipping!

    Stripped. My wings are on the floor
    And I’m crying at the core.
    But you will never see me.

    Stripped. The damage has been done
    And you did it all for fun.
    But now I see the real you…




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      Pretty good there, I can relate to that. I like this one because I feel the same way about [censored],but don't we all? Well good work.
    | Posted on 2005-02-16 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really good, I liked it alot. I usually write lyrics too (I just find them more fun to write for some reason). But anways, This was a very good write and I really really liked it. It states the struggle between (well this is stated as "the pain inside") yourself. I've felt they way you've described in here. So I know where you're coming from when you wrote this. I'd like to know what type of music this would be sing/played. I would maybe be able to think of a way, but I'm listening to "Serenity" by Godsmack so I keep getting distracted. ANyway, great write.
    | Posted on 2005-02-15 00:00:00 | by BlackAsh | [ Reply to This ]


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