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    dots Submission Name: "Drunken Valentine"dots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dots"Drunken Valentine"dots
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    Her Consumption, so devine
    Today
    It's just Me and my valentine.
    I love her and I show it
    when I lick her final remains,
    as she trickles off my lip,
    taking away my pain,
    every last ounce of her I sip.
    One after another
    For me there is no other.
    Man,- bottle or a can.
    A devotion shinning so brightly
    She makes up all the good inside me.
    She's my buzz, and I'm her flower
    pale dark honey and even amber.
    Even when I dont have much money.
    I 'll just settle for a little less quality.
    but thats only temporary.
    Soon I again will sip
    anticipating her love, her neck I lift
    towards my mouth
    Her love drips down my lips
    I love to lick it up.
    Can you feel the love here?-
    This Love of mine-
    My beer-
    my valentine.




    Submitted on 2005-02-15 00:16:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Beer commercials fight hard to fuzz the line up betwen booze and sex, too the point where the men in these commercials say, "[censored] the sex Iwant the BEER!"

    pussy and beer are no longer aligned, beer now repalces the poon.
    | Posted on 2005-02-15 00:00:00 | by screams | [ Reply to This ]
      well at least your valentine will never b!tch at ya for drinking too much i thought in a way this was cute, but sad as well. beer is for g-string strippin, booty grindin, midnight screamin kinda days...not V-day! its ok LT i will be your valentine.
    | Posted on 2005-02-15 00:00:00 | by SilentWhisper | [ Reply to This ]
      that was cute! i've had a few of those valentine's myself. i quit drinking, tho. got myself in too much trouble. this was a nice light little write, tho. i used to love my beer, 'specially Bison Brewery beer, like LemonGrass Ale, Scotch Ale and Honey Basil Ale. ah, memories of an old love... *sigh*
    | Posted on 2005-02-15 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]


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