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    dots Submission Name: Take The Tripdots
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    Author: elitegundam
    ASL Info:    25/M/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 68/90/20
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 185
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 824



    Description:
       I was again trying for a poem the was a bit 'different' than usual and here it is. Hope you enjoy (It's not supposed to make a whole lot of sense) and couldn't help the line about the board game


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    dotsTake The Tripdots
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    It's time for truthful tales,
    songs of suns and skies,
    legends, lore, and little lands,
    mighty men, magic and myth,
    brutal battles, big and bloody,
    hordes of hardened humans,
    evil enemies, enchanted elves,
    cows, crows, and crafty centaurs,
    missions of mercy, mystery, misery,
    knots and knees, knights with knives,
    tremendous temples, trembling towers,
    surrounded by shining suits of steel,
    gremlins, goblins, golems, gnomes,
    hungry, hungry, hippos,
    misty morns, midnight moons,
    shining, sparkling, shooting stars,
    everything eventually encounters an end,
    from first to finish,
    it is all-inclusivly increadable,
    slowly, softly, the story stops,
    goodbye, good luck, and good night!




    Submitted on 2005-02-15 12:53:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This piece was different and quite a bit off-center but I wouldn't classify it as a comedy...I truly found no laughs within it.

    Change increadable to incredible.
    | Posted on 2005-02-15 00:00:00 | by Spin-A-Tale | [ Reply to This ]
      crazy alliteration, it almost reads like a tongue twister. It reminds me of my middle school obsession with Margret Weis and Tracy Hickman and R.A. Salvatore. I also like how you star it with "truthful tales" as you go on to discribe fantasy material. It makes me think about how we all know that this stuff really does exist. I might be interesting if you somehow but all of the phrases in alphabetical order, but given that you don't have all of the letters its not neccesary. I just come up with strang ideas

    ~VanillaLeaves
    | Posted on 2005-02-15 00:00:00 | by VanillaLeaves | [ Reply to This ]
      This is alright... it made me think of cartoons and games... it had alot of a game feel, the words you used made me think of zelda, wizards, runescape... I have rpg and runescape flying through my head, which kinda sux cuz I am at school and can't play, lmao... nice work.
    | Posted on 2005-02-15 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know... it's probably not a comedy, but I found myself laughing throughout, although nothing's really funny within this write. I think I was laughing because it was such fun to read... I just loved "hungry, hungry, hippos"... what a fun line.

    This was just an enormous amount of fun to read, completely original, and I like it!
    | Posted on 2005-02-18 00:00:00 | by jer | [ Reply to This ]



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