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Love Born of Abduction

Author: Rubi_Roja
ASL Info:    20/F/
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Words: 90
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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this ia a very new one for me..

Love Born of Abduction

Exhausted of the land of dead,
He, who was once so content,
Wandered up to earth, peacefully,
Who would think that that same god,
After one day of walking,
Would fall in love so suddenly,
With a deity born of such beauty,

Now, not being very social,
He couldn’t make the girl feel special.
So, that god upon pondering,
Worked out a different approach
Unbeknownst to her mother
A prisoner, that day was taken
This love was born from abduction

Submitted on 2005-02-16 00:45:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Very interseting...isn't that like...was it ummmm Hades and Persephone i think it was? The god of the underworld love Persephone i think and so he kidnapper her and made her his bride...i really did like the portrayl of it, whether based on that myth or not. Godo job, i like your work.
| Posted on 2005-05-02 00:00:00 | by Mercy December | [ Reply to This ]
  it is intriguing-i'm not sure what to make of it. but you've done a good job of piquing my curiosity. nice work here.

[computer says i need more words...]
| Posted on 2005-02-16 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh how deep isthis , I really love the opening stanza to this. it's interesting when you use god you kept it uncapitalized.
I would so love more insight to this poem, so I could get the real truth behind it. It quite an intriguing poem.
| Posted on 2005-02-16 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]

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