Description: I'm not sure what to call it. can anyone help with that? I wrote this during English when I got really bored and I felt like I would cry if I didn't get some of the overwhelming feelings out of myself and since I couldn't really stand up and scream till I felt better I wrote this poem. I think I'm just feeling overwhelmed at the moment with haunting memories and a fear of hurting the people I love, seeing that everyone who associates with me winds up with something bad happening.
Haunted by myself -------------------------------------------
Choke on tears till silence falls,
upon a place the light can't reach.
Live alone in your world of pain
to save the lives of others.
They stand near but do not see,
will never understand why
they may as well be gone.
Jagged stones hit so hard
and hurt just like the truth.
Betrayal and lies soak the air
cloaked by the heavy pain
of returning memories.
awesome write i love the title to lol even though this was sad i think that you conveyed the emotion really really well and that made it something tht i really enjoyed reading i reckon if you'd made it a bit longer it would have been even better!!! good use of metapors congrats
Hey, That was good, I think we could all improve but overall it was good. I got the flow really well and acctually understood where you were coming from. It was one of those poems where you have to read the whole thing until you finally get it because if you don't you could miss the whole point. Most of the time, in those poems the whole poem is explained by the very last line. Those I think in my opinion are the best cause it makes you wanna keep reading to figure or find out what happens. Anyways, Keep writing, it was good! :) -Country_poet247-
I like this and understand where you are comming from, or maybe its just your words fit so perfect into what I have been going through. This is beautiful in its sadness and I think the title speaks the truth of all your words. You did a great job and I enjoyed reading it. Thank you- Denise
I enjoy this, I love the metaphores! Its awesome, i like these kind of writes. Very Very good. I can really relate to some of this, especially - Jagged stones hit so hard and hurt just like the truth. Love it
I think that the title is apt. We can never change the behavior of others, but we have the ability to alter our response to that behavior. No one is in our power but ourselves. We make our own ghosts and miseries. Fortunatley time gives perspective to these hurts and stones disguised as words. Ane always remember "Living well is the best revenge."
Submission Name: Haunted by myself
