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I'll Wait for it


Author: Rubi_Roja
ASL Info:    20/F/
Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 185 /164 /29
Words: 166
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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tell me what you think this poem is about.
I would like to know how people interpret it.


I'll Wait for it



I’ll wait for it, pray for it on my boney hands and knees,
Like a hungry beggar gasping for copper on the crowded street,
Eternal gratefulness will I give for the tasty bite of my first meal,
Luckily my legs have not got tired of my weight,

I’ll wait for it, while it crumbles beside me,
Flutters like fingers across my moist lips,
It’s the creaks in the floorboards, the cracks in the house,
The hiss of running water,

I’ll wait for it; perhaps it will blow away with the violent winds that come in June,
I’ll be left here, doomed by shortsighted eyes,
Become a withered old lady with writes block
And arthritic hands,

I’ll wait for it, maybe it will be what the cat drug in,
I’ll be the flowers in the summer and the first snowflake in the winter,
Become immortal, forever cherished,
I’ll wait for it, this love that wanders aimlessly,
Not eating, not sleeping, just being,




Submitted on 2005-02-16 01:32:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this poem describes a eternal wait for tru love.. so eternal that it is immortal. there is alot of references to time passing with stuff like the seasons and aging. well i think that.. i do think that i am missing a little shred of the meaning. but i hope i got close. its a good write and does feel eternal.
| Posted on 2005-02-16 00:00:00 | by snacky fish | [ Reply to This ]
  I think that what you wait for is inspiration for your writing. I think that you are so intent on llooking and praying for this that you miss what is around you. Your inspiration does not come in great storms and thunder, but also in the quiet routine of each day. Tell me if I got it . Lynn
| Posted on 2005-02-16 00:00:00 | by greensnake | [ Reply to This ]
  I read from this that you were waiting for your "first time" to be with this one specific person, even if it will be horrible... even if it will "blow you away", you will wait for it.

Umm, that or true love. Could be that too... but apparently I'm a pervert, so I'm sticking with my first answer.
| Posted on 2005-02-22 00:00:00 | by jer | [ Reply to This ]


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