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    Author: greensnake
    ASL Info:    60/female/ N.C.
    Elite Ratio:    4.17 - 770/691/75
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Thesus made his bargin with Ariadne,
    But she played him false.
    She had no power to save or condemn.
    My sisters and I watched over him.

    Unlike other women, we do not recieve
    The adulation and admiration of men.
    They want to forget our power,
    And in doing so they forget us.

    Perhaps they will praise Clotho
    For her beautiful and ever movomg tapestry.
    They will flatter Lachesis
    Hoping that she will measure long.

    But of me they do not speak.
    I am not yong and fair,
    And they are afraid
    To either praise or offend.

    It was me, Atropos, who loved Thesus
    And brought him out safe.
    He never thought of me
    Nor gave me thanks.

    His thread was thinning even then.
    Lachesis had measured his time,
    But I refused to use my knife.
    Even the Gods could not thawart me.

    I saved him for love,
    But it was not to be for me.
    He never even knew that
    The thread he followed was of my doing.





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      Hi, Lynn, unless your readers are following our thread, I don't think by and large they will get your drift. They also have to know their Greek mythology well. Poor Ariadne though. In the myth she did not play Theseus false. Quite the contrary. He used her and then abandoned her. It's interesting, Lynn that you write this in the first person as Atropos. Why do you see yourself as the thread cutter? Are you by so doing, snipping this thread? These are deep imponderables.
    By the way, if you haven't already done so, check out Andre Vancrown. I really liked his A Bucket of Rain. Arthur
    | Posted on 2005-02-17 00:00:00 | by hanuman | [ Reply to This ]
      First I must confess I know very little about Greek mythology.
    However I donít think anyone needs to know it, because
    These elements of human traits are seen in everyday life.
    No matter what time line you choose to use.

    I am glad to see that you chose a unique way of getting your actually message across, otherwise it would be just a book already read.

    I think you choose Atropos point of view because you are actually are a thread cutter
    Because of your unselfish true self and add in the fact of you being a nurse for so long.
    Then intermixed that in any of your loving relationship you were always the one putting far more then your partner. Which is the message I think you trying to say, but in a very classy way.
    Why canít people see me in this light, waiting for someone to take notice.
    Well, Lynn I have, hereís a big hug for making the world a better place.

    Excellent write

    | Posted on 2005-02-19 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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