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    dots Submission Name: "A Lighter Shade of Piss"dots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 903
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       dROP dROP pISS pISS oH wHAT a RElIEf IT is!



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    dots"A Lighter Shade of Piss"dots
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    So there I am
    with my dick in hand
    concentrating on hitting the can.
    Swaying to and frow.
    I'm spinning
    and thinking
    where did all the piss go?
    As the knocks at the door persist,
    I notice how bad I missed.
    On the walls on the door,
    I even soaked the toilet paper roll.
    But AHHHH what a feeling!
    As warm droplets of piss fall from the ceiling.
    I opened the door whislteling a tune.
    Relieved and Oh so happy,
    it wasn't my bathroom.
    It's a shot that takes skill.
    I've practiced all my life,
    and practice I still will.
    For women it's a slam dunk.
    Just be happy guys dont
    have to stand while taking a dump.

    L A M E M A N S T E R M S




    Submitted on 2005-02-16 14:25:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      LOL that was too funny. its nice to see youre getting back in the groove of things. you had a couple spelling errors here and there but who effin cares. maybe you were concentrating too hard on the deed at hand to notice
    | Posted on 2005-02-16 00:00:00 | by SilentWhisper | [ Reply to This ]
      I think the funniest thing is how very often this really happens... and you've described it to a "T". Excellent. The worst is what my old roommate used to call "viper piss", where, for some odd reason, after sex, the urine comes out in two streams at a right angle to one another, managing to hit the floor on both sides of the toilet. You can get one stream to go in, but only by making the other stream miss BADLY!

    Great Write
    | Posted on 2005-02-22 00:00:00 | by jer | [ Reply to This ]


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