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    dots Submission Name: I can'tdots
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    Author: little_theif
    ASL Info:    20/F/Halifax
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 42/58/26
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 241
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 800



    Description:
       This one comes from a relation ship I had with a guy. He tended to give me the impression that he should come first before everything else, friends, schoolwork, family.


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    What would you do,
    If I told you I would die for you?
    What would you say,
    If I threw it all away?
    Would it make you happy?
    Would it make you smile?
    Would it make you love me,
    Even for a little while?
    What if I would do,
    Everything you want me to?
    What if I could be,
    Everything you want of me?
    Then could you love me,
    As much as I want you to?
    Then could you want me,
    The way that I would love of you?
    Is that what you need,
    Is that what you want from me?
    Is that the sort of guy you are,
    Is that the sort of girl I have to be?
    That's not something I can do,
    That's not something I can give to you.
    I'm sorry,
    I can't.




    Submitted on 2005-02-16 22:17:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love the way it all flows and rhymes, and the message is so clear.

    The one line I would change, for the sake of rhythm is:

    Is that the sort of guy you are,
    Is that the sort of girl I have to be?

    to:

    Is that the sort of guy you are,
    Is that the girl I have to be?
    | Posted on 2005-02-17 00:00:00 | by Amelit | [ Reply to This ]
      very nice poem i see the message in there...i can kinda relate to iti love someone and i would do anything for her...and i still dont think it would be enough...any way nice rhyinig scheem to me it flowed well l ilked...any way good luck with life
    | Posted on 2005-02-16 00:00:00 | by yuber1990 | [ Reply to This ]



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