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    dots Submission Name: That'll teach me!dots
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    Author: ARCHIE
    ASL Info:    37 YOA Male in Africa
    Elite Ratio:    2.44 - 90/126/40
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 797
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    Bytes: 453



    Description:
       Broke leg in 4 places stuck in wheelchair for 3 months


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    dotsThat'll teach me!dots
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    Snapunfantastic
    leg lost in a damned minute
    gone for a monthor3
    still the pain
    burrows
    deeper than cut flesh
    God
    would you belive it
    walking
    running
    strolling
    gone, not for good
    just a while
    that'll teach me!
    to appreciate
    simple mobility
    d
    o
    w
    n
    can be dangerous when
    looking
    up.




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      I can relate to this. I experienced my first severe car accident just last week. I wrote a poem about it called "Casual Calamity". My story doesn't have such a severe consequence as yours does though, although you seem to have a happy outlook still. I caught it in that moment though, that sense that we are fragile little machines of pain just waiting to be torn apart or at least in need of repair as we bounce around carelessly in this world.
    | Posted on 2005-02-17 00:00:00 | by kanu | [ Reply to This ]


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