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    dots Submission Name: The Romantic Highdots
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    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    23/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 365/459/201
    Words: 223
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Romance
    Total Views: 849
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1509



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       Ah, Bonnie. If only I had yelled at you more. Now I have to write a freakin song about it.

    *Yes, you DO have to come down.*


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    dotsThe Romantic Highdots
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    The danger of love you wonít escape.
    I ask myself how long it will take
    For love to chase me as it chases you,
    For love to stop breaking my heart in two.

    Iím not jealous, but heís not amazing.
    Youíre not in love but you might be crazy.
    He doesnít call honey,
    And itís not lovey dovey.
    But I can see where itís going.

    Chorus:
    Itís the romantic high
    The little twinkle in your eye.
    Itís the romantic high
    How you giggle and sigh.
    Could I pull you down again
    Or get up to face you, friend.
    Itís too much and you know why
    Cos someday youíll come down
    From the romantic high.


    Wonít say youíre wrong
    But maybe youíre cominí on too strong.
    I thought I wouldnít encourage
    Your absented minded day dreams.
    But my plans always get caught in you,
    Come undone in the seams.

    These days you make it as though
    Iím not here.
    You see him and suddenly I disappear.
    Find myself your twisted afterthoughts,
    Hating valentines and roses
    as I watch the slowly turning clock.

    Bridge:
    Cos you gotta come down.
    You gotta come down.
    Cos you gotta come down
    Someday.
    You gotta come down
    Someday.

    Chorus x2

    Bridge




    Submitted on 2005-02-16 23:14:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You should really get a band together or something. The title was a really interesting title. Which made the chorus really good. I like the part when you said

    He doesnít call honey,
    And itís not lovey dovey.
    But I can see where itís going.

    Hmm this guy doesn't soundn like I nice boyfriend, or guy friend. He seems to much of himself. doesn't seem fair to you. Unless I am reading it wrong. Which I don't think I am.

    I think you did a pretty good job on the rhyming scheme. I didn't see it forced. Good Job on that.. And everytime flowed together..

    Overall another great write..
    lovelovelovelove it


    Love it

    Stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hannah... I don't know if Bonnie told you or not.. but they broke up. She's with Tony now. And you wrote this like... two days ago? Nevermind. I'm tired.
    | Posted on 2005-03-19 00:00:00 | by Jester_Gesture | [ Reply to This ]
      i'd like to know what kind of tune this goes to, because i liked the lyrics.i though that it was a little short. have you ever played this, because depending on the instrumental, it could be longer than it seems.i've been there and i know how you feel. romance is for idiots, love is the shiznit.lol. good job. record it,NOW~nahlij
    | Posted on 2005-03-18 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it. I have been in your place a time or two, too Katie. I know how you feel. Try to be happy for her though. She is your friend, and just because she and Rob are together, doesn't make you any less important. I have learned that over time... Your friends love you just as much when they have a bf/gf as they do when they don't have one. Later.
    | Posted on 2005-02-17 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]


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