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Submission Name: untitled dots

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Author:	wildchild
ASL Info:	19/f/northwest
Elite Ratio:	4.48 - 307/268/27
Words:	55

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
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eh, another day. i couldn't even think of what to call it.

untitled dots

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How many lives
will be lost
to the selfishness
of human emotions?

Old men declare
the war
but it is the young,
who fight it.

What's to happen now?
Too late for
peace.
Pushed too far
for reconciliation.
Too bruised
for healing.

The fate has
been pronounced.
Doom,
is destiny.

Submitted on 2005-02-16 23:16:19 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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||| Comments |||
  I agree with your message that if there's a problem with two presidents/monarchs/prime ministers in stead of just sending those who have no say into battle they should do it themselves. I've been saying that for years lol they should just fight it out...and televise it! But back to the poem I like it a lot, very deep and meaningful and really speaks to me. Well done
-X-
| Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by irvine_valentin | [ Reply to This ]
  im at a loss, again.

no, it's not I don't know how to comment, it's just, I personally think that people who write poems about the war aren't helping the war.
I'm a conservative, I guess that means I'm red, are you blue(liberal)?

~CinnamonT~
| Posted on 2005-10-30 00:00:00 | by Avril54 | [ Reply to This ]
  We who decide to write on war join a long and Illustrious line of poets and writers from over the years. I know that as a sensitive artist one feels a need to speak out eventually on the horrors of war. This is a well written piece but as I mentioned there are many great ones that precede it. My favorite would be 'Only Pawn In They're Game' by Dylan. A song, true, but like so many of his a poem in disguise. A piece that overshadows many including my own 'How Much Blood Will It Take' . But kudos for speaking out on such a terrible side of humanity
dmm
| Posted on 2005-02-17 00:00:00 | by dmm | [ Reply to This ]
  Gooder, lol. We share the a lot of the same thoughts on war. But I can't seem to get anything in writing, since all I do is mainly growl and mummble a lot . But hey, no worries.

We both have people in our lives who have served, most people at least know someone who has. I know that you know "old men" have faught for our country, but they do not know what may come form this war. I'm saying that it we will be worse from it, nor am I saying that we will be better because of it. I can't see the future (though somethimes I wish I could) but I know that no matter what happens, unless the world is blown to bits by mans stubborne stupidity, there will be fighting, there will be death to innocents, there will be war.

Uhm, I seem to have rambled again, please, if it bothers you tell me, so that I can stop wasting your time.
Bon
| Posted on 2005-02-17 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]
  Sad, so pessimistic. I'm not sure if I agree with the second stanza. Old men did fight in wars but then again so are we...well maybe not us personally but people in this day and age are. At the same time maybe it is better for them over there where they can see the evil, back here where it is meant to be peace the evil can sneak up unexpectedly and consume all.
| Posted on 2005-02-17 00:00:00 | by Cat | [ Reply to This ]
  hey wildcild ;0)

you are wild ;0)... I think you have some good points here in your poems

fx.

Old men declare,
the war
but it is the young,
who fight it.

I just wondered what war you where referring to, the war ?

You should try to give it more power, push your emotions into them and tell what the real horror is.

fx.

Old men declare wars
viel young boy are getting
blood on their hands
getting killed

and so on..

try to put more horror in it ;0)

I do not know if you are able to use it ;0)

Keep on writing ;0)

KNS
| Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by KNS | [ Reply to This ]

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