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    dots Submission Name: Thoughtsdots
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    Author: PookiezBookie
    ASL Info:    16/f/az
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 103/129/49
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       thoughts i was having i felt like writing them down.


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    dotsThoughtsdots
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    Tell me everything and be truthful. And I might just be honest with you.
    I'm tired of giving everything that I have and getting ntohing back in return.
    Don't i deserve more? Better?
    You should believe in me with the best of you and you could possibly get a piece of me.
    Then, I will learn to trust you.
    But, betray me once, and forever I will be gone.
    I shouldnt go krazie over you or fall head over heels because then I know that it is too good to be true.
    But keep me guessing and wanting more, could lead to your advantage.
    Give it to me all at once, and you will leave me bored and looking elsewhere.
    Time is only waited on by those who have nothing better to do. But time waits for me.
    I have no patience for those who choose to waiste my time and play with my mind.




    Submitted on 2005-02-16 23:26:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well I can say this real and true. Good point on how ou say all at once, see that was my problem, I gave to much love and respect all at once. I never did her wrong or waisted her time but I guess I made her bored so she left. I like this one, good jb agin.
    | Posted on 2005-02-17 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]


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