Description: Sometime in life, a poet gets so luckyand has a person like Cindy come in your life make your poetry actually mean something. It was so awesome that she called me from Austrailia to tell me how much she love it, now how great is that.
Angels of the Sea -------------------------------------------
ANGELS OF THE SEA
While standing by the coastal shore
Mesmerized by ocean waves
Hoping to see the angels of the sea
Something leaps so high and far
Itís Scarlet, my dolphin sister
Dancing and prancing so gracefully
High above the ocean sea
She was squealing with her high-pitch voice
Come play with me
Heading straight for the shore
Encouraging me to dive right in
I dove so deep and jumped so high
I felt like a dolphin inside
I swam, flipped and frolicked all day
Smiling and learning with my pod family
Witnessing first hand what all kids dream
The splendor of freedom unknown to them
Where splashing, flipping and eating all day
Wonít get them sent to their room
EDWARD K DEPUTY
DEDICATED TO CINDY
Who is 13 and retarded, yet so love my poetry
I love how you use a dolphin in it it adds a sense of mysterious attributes to this sea you are enjoying yourself so much in. It also had a great flow. It felt like a poem setting you back to describe a place of true paradise. Great job. Cindy would really like it herself!
The title of this caught my interest because I visualized a mermaid. The dolphin subject is just as mystical. This free verse with such describtive stanza's " Dancing and prancing so gracefully High above the ocean sea" unfold such a beautiful comfortable scenerio. Read one of your reviews with some possible changes that could refine this treasure. ~always with love Cheryl~
its so peaceful and playful, [censored] me inside a dream i didnt know could exsist, and yet somehow, someway I am aware of what is happening in the world around me once again. -It would be so awesome if it rhymed, I am obssesed with poems that have verses and rhyme, yours has verses and doesnt rhyme, but you make it so awesome that it doesnt need to.
Ed, this was truely an inspiration. I have a need to draw this poem. It practically paints the picture itself. a sparkling blue ocean littered with frolicking dolphins, humans and merpeople. LOVE LOVE LOVED it..
To be worry free, alive and happy. Things we all crave in life. It's wonderful how you captured the words and feelings in this poem. Close your eyes and I am there jumping and swimming right next to you. I love your dedication. Beautiful, Carol
i really did adore this poem. what i liked so much about it is the carefree beauty that you see here. Dolphins are MY ABSOULTE FAVORITE animal ever! (i even studied marine biology for a while) the splendor and complete happiness always amazes me with their perpetual grin. beautiful poem, Im sure Cindy would be pleased.
This is a really cool writing... Though I am not really one for uppity and happy writing... This poem really struck me as the kind that is caring and really just...I dunno... Upbeat... I can definately feel a distinguishing sense of supreme happiness that alot of animals in the wild probably feel... I am most positive that cindy would love this writing... And the fact that you made it only for her will make it 10 times better than before... An excellent writing that portrays true happiness and bliss... Great job. .Caleb.
yes ed, this connection you have made is what really matters, and it seems a little unappropriate to pull it apart in a she-loves-me-she-loves-me-not-manner. what i would say about his is that the use of simple language and child-like feeling is very appropriate to what you have to say and where it is going. it is not always an easy thing to do, and so this is to its credit. it is scattered and flippant and say it as you see it, much like a child would do, being distracted amidst one thing when another thing of interest comes along. like colours and animals and ice cream that always get the attention of the little kids. and this is the feeling i ge there.
i do feel that this piece needs some punctuation. i can see why you would not use it, but i feel that you need to take us where you want to take us and not rely on us reading your piece as it is meant to be read. it is a little tricky and awkward at times and this is an injustice to the words that are there and who they are for. innocent and pure it is, i just think a few stops and links would help convey this in the purest form. hope all is well ed, long time no see and such take care on1eday.co.uk
How beautiful is this. And so graphic you can almost feel the ocean spray on your face... I've just watched a movie called "Sea People" and this poem fits in so well with the theme... wish I was a mermaid now so I can join them in their frolicking. Up up and away... Nice.
Such a cute ending to this poem. Humanising the dolphins and likening them to playful children that get to do everything without getting into trouble. Very well written. I absolutely love dolphins and have then on keyrings and t-shirts and screensavers and and and... lovely poem. I feel you've captured their playful nature one hundred percent!